Friday, November 18, 2005
Pringgo: Outline
Thesis Statement: The advantages of listening to music for outweigh the disadvantages
Topic sentence: 1. Music can improve human intelligence.
2. Music can reduce human stress ness.
3. Music can be a medium for human to improve their creativity.
Concluding sentence: We know that music become an important role in human life
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Pringgo,
Your topic sentences are good. Just make sure that in the body of your developmental paragraphs, you compare and contrast the advantages and disadvantages of listening music.
Also, I suggest you change the order of your topic sentences presentation to 2,3,1.
Good luck!
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Your topic sentences are good. Just make sure that in the body of your developmental paragraphs, you compare and contrast the advantages and disadvantages of listening music.
Also, I suggest you change the order of your topic sentences presentation to 2,3,1.
Good luck!
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