Friday, November 18, 2005
Andry: Outline
TS : Being mean is needed in the work field
#we can use all kinds of things to achieve the goals
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Andry,
I am confused with your topic sentences. Do you want to talk about how to be mean in the work field or about why being mean is needed in the work field? Reading your thesis statement, I thought you're going to talk about the reasons, but your topic sentences especially the 3rd is on the how.
Also, if you want to talk about the why (like in your 1st and 2nd topic sentences), I can't see the benefits or the reasons of why being mean is necessary.
If you need more insights on your outline, please send me an email or contact me before our Wednesday meeting.
Good luck!
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I am confused with your topic sentences. Do you want to talk about how to be mean in the work field or about why being mean is needed in the work field? Reading your thesis statement, I thought you're going to talk about the reasons, but your topic sentences especially the 3rd is on the how.
Also, if you want to talk about the why (like in your 1st and 2nd topic sentences), I can't see the benefits or the reasons of why being mean is necessary.
If you need more insights on your outline, please send me an email or contact me before our Wednesday meeting.
Good luck!
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